February 22nd, 2015, 8:52 am

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Reply Squirreltastic-Blue, February 22nd, 2015, 9:07 am

A couple of nit picks in the text.
The fourth speech bubble should have a capitol at the beginning of the sentence, and "preasure" is spelled "pressure" with a second "s" instead of an "a."
The final speech bubble just needs a few things removed. I will highlight what should be removed in square parenthesis. "Girls [sure] won't be cruel to each other[s]... right?"

Reply Helsic, February 22nd, 2015, 10:06 am

Thank you dear, English is not my native language, I'll check the mistakes at once!

Reply Squirreltastic-Blue, February 22nd, 2015, 7:02 pm

@Helsic: Hey, you fixed it! That's awesome!

Reply Anon (Guest), September 16th, 2015, 10:19 am

This is cute so far. I think there aren't lots of chubby magical girls. Rose Quartz and Amethyst are chubby magical girls from Steven Universe but I haven't seen a lot of- mostly I don't think there are lots of fat magical girls. Steven Universe is Western animation instead of anime or Japanese animation. Oh an all girls school, I can relate to the chubby girl a little I am slightly overweight and other girls have harrassed me less frequently than boys. I guess girls can still be assholes, but boys have been more frequently assholes to me. This is a good start. Maybe I will continue.

Reply Supreme Reaper Reila (Guest), November 16th, 2015, 2:40 pm


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